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My First Fanfic
by John Su

Sonic the Hedgehog ran very quickly down the hall to where the fire was coming from. While running he ducked into a rolling spin and made a sound like "@@@@@@@!" so he could dodge the fireball lasers.

At the top of the staircase he stood up and shouted at the top of the staircase "Sephiroth!" The man with long hair turned slowly and with a flash of his sword removed Sonic's nipples from his body.

"OUCH that hurts!1" cried Sonic, hurting. "Looks like I will need the power of the CHAOS CRYSTAL for this opponent!" and he raised up a handful of glowing gems.

The light from the jewels summoned all the legendary pokemon in the world together and they fused together into a Pyschic Ghost Dragon Pokemon. "LEAVE THIS TO ME, SONIC THE HEDGEHOG!" it said in the voice a thousand monsters, and shot a giant Hadouken at Sephiroth.

Sephiroth bounced it back with a spin of his blade, and it hit the Psy-Gho-Dra-Mon in the face, crashing him to the floor and half-crushing No-Nipples Sonic. "This is bad!" said Half-Dead No-Nipples the Hedgehog. "It looks like we will need to call for that man, Psyghodramon!"

"YES" he agreed, and used his 7 physic goat dragon balls to make a wish "SEND US THE CHOSEN HERO OF PROPHECY!" as Sephiroth slowly descended to finish them off.

Just then a bright light from the sky shone, and the Grand Master John Su descended from the moon on rocket powered rocket boots, with a beautiful woman on each arm. When he landed, there was a chorus and fanfare of trumpets, and he lowered his sunglasses and said "Yo."

"Who are you" said Sephiroth as he threw a ninja star at light speed at John Su. John Su turned and winked at the star, and the bright light instantly dissolved it into space dust. "Pretty good," said Sephiroth, "but your still gonna loose!" and he transformed into Super Saiyan 4 Sephiroth.

"Take this!" he screamed as he flew towards John Su. John Su flexed a single muscle, generating an awesome MANWAVE that overpowered Super Sephiroth and sent him flying into space, frozen forever in defeat.

"Thank you for saving us, John Su" said the world. "You are so strong and cool"

"I know," he replied, and jumped back up to the moon after resurrecting the 4th Hokage.
Well, I'm done with Fanary February, but I figured why not squeeze in a FanFic while I can?

The hardest part about writing this was writing it.
Also forcing myself to use "loose" instead of "lose."
But it was eventually fun.

Made in Fla Notepad
Copyrights Everywhere

EDIT: Manwave, for those who are curious: [link]
Also I am sorry for resurrecting Aerith (who nobody likes) at the end. I will change it to someone else who will not be a spoiler.

EDIT2: Fanart of Fanfics?? Wow! Thank you Lark, Elaine, Wasil, Wasil again, and LegalDrugFanatic!
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I don't even know where to begin...
This wonderful example of the written word leaves me in tears.

It starts with such energy, immediately taking the reader into the action and exploding with "@@@@@@@@@@!"
Never have I seen such a sound. So out of the box.
Unique, truly unique like the rest of the story.

The allusions and references leave a powerful postmodern sentiment, bringing in familiar faces to make it an instant classic.

But then to top it all off, a wonderful play on the "deus ex machina" when you introduce the hero.
Seemingly overpowered, an embodiment of overt masculine strength and charisma.
Until you realize the symbolism.
I can't even describe the look on my face when I realized how well you hid that.

I can't believe this is your first.
You leave me breathless.
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542 out of 554 deviants thought this was fair.

This is a deeply intense and powerful emotional thrill-ride of a story. It literally blew my mind; I had to pick up all the little pieces of it and put them back together in my skull so I could think of how to express my awe for the story in this critique.

First of all, Sonic is purely awesome. I didn't know you invented him. Or Sephiroth. Or John Su. Those have got to be some of the most spectacular OCs I have ever witnessed. Each one of them was written well; I could get to know the characters accurately just by the dialogue. Even without supplying a backstory, you've immaculately portrayed everyone.

The action sequences were flawless. I could see everything very well in my mind. You've handpicked some choice adjectives, verbs, adverbs, and nouns that all congeal together like a good stew. Your verbiage is powerful.

All-in-all, most original fic ever. You win so hard that it's causing tectonic disruptions. Call Spielberg or Lucas and get one of them to direct the movie.
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ebnetboyorsomething Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2015  Professional Artist
best fanfic ever 10/10 - IGN
Springtrap12345 Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2015  Student
LOL half-dead no-nipple hedgehog
doogenheimersmith Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Sepiroth looks like Jack skellington dressed like Sepiroth.
HoshPosh Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2014  Hobbyist
The end though X'D
Ryochi-The-Bestest Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Absolutely life changing. This masterful work of fiction has left me in tears. I am so moved by your words.
IHAZBUBBLEZ Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2014
This has changed my life. XD
TheSavageChicken Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is beautiful... ;^;
Strawberry-Spectrum Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2014
The innovative ways of how JohnSu (the writer) can express his  vision through text is a risk that delivered unmatched results. truly, this is one of the most awe-inspiring experiences that ive ever enjoyed. both readers and fellow writers end up as a pupil of JohnSu's language weaving. not a sentence goes by without meaning, not one paragraph is too short or too long, every moment carries a sense of suspense, excitement, and yearning to read more! also, this was pretty hilarious to read.
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Cutebunny50 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Taskidog Featured By Owner May 13, 2014
someone please turn this into a gmod video
eggplantpocky Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Student Digital Artist
fist of the north star????? @@@@@@@@@@@@@@@!!!!!!
inukagome134 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Student General Artist
The ending made me cry... Touched my heart and made me reflect on many things.

Truly an amazing work of art! Every other literary work pales in comparison to this fanfiction you have presented here.

Keep up the beautiful work, and thank you for making me experience such a rush of emotions that I thought I never even had in me... :happycry:
DrawtoonzStudio Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
In every sense of the word, a masterpiece.
JohnSu Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
pikaponn Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013
Truly moving.
RiceBalls4Me Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
At first, it seemed deep, then asdkfjaldfjaldfj, poof.
missituk Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013
This touched my heart :')
Calamity9 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student General Artist
Instead of reading textbooks in school, we should just read this over and over again. It's the only thing we'll ever need to know.
Squadlala-the-13th Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
The best fanfiction I've ever read !:iconawesomefaceplz:
MercLleviathan Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Student Writer
I remember this story from long ago, and all I have to say in response to finding it again is "@@@@@@@@".

Great work, this is probably one of my favorite fics ever.
JohnSu Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
how do you do fanfics?
JohnSu Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
with gusto
madsan2 Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2012  Student
so segoi! :iconblushplz:
JohnSu Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh yeah, I totally forgot to put some Japanese and honorifics in there.
madsan2 Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2012  Student
hehe well there's always room for more fanfics!
risaaa Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012
I'm not going to lie, I cheer myself up by reading this when I feel down. Thank you John Su.
JohnSu Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome.

*moon jump*
Baxterbender Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012
Sums up pretty much every fanfic on dA


....That was backwards wasn't it?
JohnSu Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
it is consistent with the middle.
Baxterbender Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012
*drools over the magical JohnSu actually replying*
Pepperoach Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2012  Student General Artist
A friend of mine made me narrate this, so I went ahead and uploaded it here so the world can see: [link]

(WARNING: I have an accent)
CuddlesDaKat Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012  Student General Artist
JTravoltaIIVII Featured By Owner May 11, 2012
I would tell you you're going to jail for this but it is clear that no prison can hold you
SonadowFan888 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
KrisTheTrashLord Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2012  Student General Artist
Did someone try to do a dramatic reading of this?
JohnSu Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
not to my knowledge.
KrisTheTrashLord Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012  Student General Artist
I think this should get a dramatic reading.

I can volunteer.
MadRatBird Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Why is this not a DD? 8(.
royaled123 Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I choked on my pizza just a little bit amg.
CrimzonLogic Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2012  Student General Artist
It's brilliant, man. Pure brilliance. I can die happy, now that I have read such a masterful work of literature. :lol:
captain-vodka Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2012
I feel like there should be sequels and illustrations.
Theeywillnotforceeus Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2011
The artism in this story shows potential.

i-z-e Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I've never came so much in my entire life. Bravo, good sir. Bravo.
somahiru Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011  Student General Artist
:iconjcdr: Made me read this out loud, best reading ever.
StickyRicePlatter Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2011  Professional Traditional Artist
The best, and ONLY best fan fic man has ever imagined. your humor and wit are unprecedented.
Zarokin Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011
Best...shit...EVER. 8I
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