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My First Fanfic
by `JohnSuMy First Fanfic
by John Su
Sonic the Hedgehog ran very quickly down the hall to where the fire was coming from. While running he ducked into a rolling spin and made a sound like "@@@@@@@!" so he could dodge the fireball lasers.
At the top of the staircase he stood up and shouted at the top of the staircase "Sephiroth!" The man with long hair turned slowly and with a flash of his sword removed Sonic's nipples from his body.
"OUCH that hurts!1" cried Sonic, hurting. "Looks like I will need the power of the CHAOS CRYSTAL for this opponent!" and he raised up a handful of glowing gems.
The light from the jewels summoned all the legendary pokemon in the world together and they fused together into a Pyschic Ghost Dragon Pokemon. "LEAVE THIS TO ME, SONIC THE HEDGEHOG!" it said in the voice a thousand monsters, and shot a giant Hadouken at Sephiroth.
Sephiroth bounced it back with a spin of his blade, and it hit the Psy-Gho-Dra-Mon in the face, crashing him to the floor and half-crushing No-Nipples Sonic. "This is bad!" said Half-Dead No-Nipples the Hedgehog. "It looks like we will need to call for that man, Psyghodramon!"
"YES" he agreed, and used his 7 physic goat dragon balls to make a wish "SEND US THE CHOSEN HERO OF PROPHECY!" as Sephiroth slowly descended to finish them off.
Just then a bright light from the sky shone, and the Grand Master John Su descended from the moon on rocket powered rocket boots, with a beautiful woman on each arm. When he landed, there was a chorus and fanfare of trumpets, and he lowered his sunglasses and said "Yo."
"Who are you" said Sephiroth as he threw a ninja star at light speed at John Su. John Su turned and winked at the star, and the bright light instantly dissolved it into space dust. "Pretty good," said Sephiroth, "but your still gonna loose!" and he transformed into Super Saiyan 4 Sephiroth.
"Take this!" he screamed as he flew towards John Su. John Su flexed a single muscle, generating an awesome MANWAVE that overpowered Super Sephiroth and sent him flying into space, frozen forever in defeat.
"Thank you for saving us, John Su" said the world. "You are so strong and cool"
"I know," he replied, and jumped back up to the moon after resurrecting the 4th Hokage.
Your has inspired me to work harder than ever on the comics in my channel. You truly are one of the most original and incredibly human beings to ever exist. The imagery surpasses that of nearly anything ever written. The art above is heavy competition for the best in DeviantART.
I may need surgery after reading this because it blew my mind so hard but damn. It was worth it.
And on the Eighth Day He said...
Let there be JohnSu.
First of all, Sonic is purely awesome. I didn't know you invented him. Or Sephiroth. Or John Su. Those have got to be some of the most spectacular OCs I have ever witnessed. Each one of them was written well; I could get to know the characters accurately just by the dialogue. Even without supplying a backstory, you've immaculately portrayed everyone.
The action sequences were flawless. I could see everything very well in my mind. You've handpicked some choice adjectives, verbs, adverbs, and nouns that all congeal together like a good stew. Your verbiage is powerful.
All-in-all, most original fic ever. You win so hard that it's causing tectonic disruptions. Call Spielberg or Lucas and get one of them to direct the movie.
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