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My First Fanfic
by John Su

Sonic the Hedgehog ran very quickly down the hall to where the fire was coming from. While running he ducked into a rolling spin and made a sound like "@@@@@@@!" so he could dodge the fireball lasers.

At the top of the staircase he stood up and shouted at the top of the staircase "Sephiroth!" The man with long hair turned slowly and with a flash of his sword removed Sonic's nipples from his body.

"OUCH that hurts!1" cried Sonic, hurting. "Looks like I will need the power of the CHAOS CRYSTAL for this opponent!" and he raised up a handful of glowing gems.

The light from the jewels summoned all the legendary pokemon in the world together and they fused together into a Pyschic Ghost Dragon Pokemon. "LEAVE THIS TO ME, SONIC THE HEDGEHOG!" it said in the voice a thousand monsters, and shot a giant Hadouken at Sephiroth.

Sephiroth bounced it back with a spin of his blade, and it hit the Psy-Gho-Dra-Mon in the face, crashing him to the floor and half-crushing No-Nipples Sonic. "This is bad!" said Half-Dead No-Nipples the Hedgehog. "It looks like we will need to call for that man, Psyghodramon!"

"YES" he agreed, and used his 7 physic goat dragon balls to make a wish "SEND US THE CHOSEN HERO OF PROPHECY!" as Sephiroth slowly descended to finish them off.

Just then a bright light from the sky shone, and the Grand Master John Su descended from the moon on rocket powered rocket boots, with a beautiful woman on each arm. When he landed, there was a chorus and fanfare of trumpets, and he lowered his sunglasses and said "Yo."

"Who are you" said Sephiroth as he threw a ninja star at light speed at John Su. John Su turned and winked at the star, and the bright light instantly dissolved it into space dust. "Pretty good," said Sephiroth, "but your still gonna loose!" and he transformed into Super Saiyan 4 Sephiroth.

"Take this!" he screamed as he flew towards John Su. John Su flexed a single muscle, generating an awesome MANWAVE that overpowered Super Sephiroth and sent him flying into space, frozen forever in defeat.

"Thank you for saving us, John Su" said the world. "You are so strong and cool"

"I know," he replied, and jumped back up to the moon after resurrecting the 4th Hokage.
Well, I'm done with Fanary February, but I figured why not squeeze in a FanFic while I can?

The hardest part about writing this was writing it.
Also forcing myself to use "loose" instead of "lose."
But it was eventually fun.

Made in Fla Notepad
Copyrights Everywhere

EDIT: Manwave, for those who are curious: [link]
Also I am sorry for resurrecting Aerith (who nobody likes) at the end. I will change it to someone else who will not be a spoiler.

EDIT2: Fanart of Fanfics?? Wow! Thank you Lark, Elaine, Wasil, Wasil again, and LegalDrugFanatic!
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I don't even know where to begin...
This wonderful example of the written word leaves me in tears.

It starts with such energy, immediately taking the reader into the action and exploding with "@@@@@@@@@@!"
Never have I seen such a sound. So out of the box.
Unique, truly unique like the rest of the story.

The allusions and references leave a powerful postmodern sentiment, bringing in familiar faces to make it an instant classic.

But then to top it all off, a wonderful play on the "deus ex machina" when you introduce the hero.
Seemingly overpowered, an embodiment of overt masculine strength and charisma.
Until you realize the symbolism.
I can't even describe the look on my face when I realized how well you hid that.


I can't believe this is your first.
You leave me breathless.
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This is a deeply intense and powerful emotional thrill-ride of a story. It literally blew my mind; I had to pick up all the little pieces of it and put them back together in my skull so I could think of how to express my awe for the story in this critique.

First of all, Sonic is purely awesome. I didn't know you invented him. Or Sephiroth. Or John Su. Those have got to be some of the most spectacular OCs I have ever witnessed. Each one of them was written well; I could get to know the characters accurately just by the dialogue. Even without supplying a backstory, you've immaculately portrayed everyone.

The action sequences were flawless. I could see everything very well in my mind. You've handpicked some choice adjectives, verbs, adverbs, and nouns that all congeal together like a good stew. Your verbiage is powerful.

All-in-all, most original fic ever. You win so hard that it's causing tectonic disruptions. Call Spielberg or Lucas and get one of them to direct the movie.
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TheSavageChicken Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is beautiful... ;^;
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Strawberry-Spectrum Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2014
The innovative ways of how JohnSu (the writer) can express his  vision through text is a risk that delivered unmatched results. truly, this is one of the most awe-inspiring experiences that ive ever enjoyed. both readers and fellow writers end up as a pupil of JohnSu's language weaving. not a sentence goes by without meaning, not one paragraph is too short or too long, every moment carries a sense of suspense, excitement, and yearning to read more! also, this was pretty hilarious to read.
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Cutebunny50 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
MANLY POWERS. XD 
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Taskidog Featured By Owner May 13, 2014
someone please turn this into a gmod video
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eggplantpocky Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Student Digital Artist
fist of the north star????? @@@@@@@@@@@@@@@!!!!!!
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inukagome134 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Student General Artist
The ending made me cry... Touched my heart and made me reflect on many things.

Truly an amazing work of art! Every other literary work pales in comparison to this fanfiction you have presented here.

Keep up the beautiful work, and thank you for making me experience such a rush of emotions that I thought I never even had in me... :happycry:
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DrawtoonzStudio Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013
In every sense of the word, a masterpiece.
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JohnSu Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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